Friday, November 30, 2012

The Big Ride

This my Wheeeeeeeeeeeee writing!

I see the steepness of the big tower of terror, no one ever went on this ride and they say if you do you will never come back! But I just think it is a silly rumour. I look down it’s so so steep so so so so so steep I faint! 10 minutes later I wake up I can’t see anything all I can see is blurriness, it gets clearer I finally am able to see and now I am just going to get it over and done with, ok here I go, “ 1 2 “

“ Wait! Are you sure you want to do this? ” said Felicity.

“ Hey I didn’t know you were here.”

“ Well I am, so are you sure you want to do this? “

“ Yes I am sure. “

“ Ok but I warned you. “

Ok 3, 2,  1 GO!  Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee, over the jump up and down up and down, this is like I am going as fast a vampire running. I am going soooooooooooo fast. I think for a second I’m going really fast and when I get to the end of the ride I will probably keep going and land in that prickle bush, I was so worried I forgot that I was already on the ride and I didn’t know where I was going “ ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh “ I screamed. Help me God Help me. I was almost at the end and I realised I was slowing down, the ride must slow down when you are about to get to the end. I stop at the end I look up I can see all the people cheering for me I feel so proud of myself and that was a big ride.

The next day I was in the newspaper because I was the first person to ever ride the tower of terror and now everyone is riding the tower of terror, but the only thing is my mum didn’t know I went on the ride because I told her that I was going to the library. “ Hey Parris “ said mum.
Oh no.

“ Yeah. “

Well I saw this kid in the newspaper and she was the first person to ride the tower of terror and I heard her name is Parris Petera.

I might of made a quick stop before the library. “ Parris you are grounded.



  1. Hi Parris, you are far more braver than me. I quite like the rides but will happily watch others! We got trashed in assembly today with kea getting 5th for mostly everything. We'll be upping our game next year...have to! I cant even see our points on the board from the other side of the hall where I sit with room 11. Rather sad actually! Cheers Mrs Miller

    1. Yes, go Kea 2013!

      Your writing is exciting and well structured, Parris. Just like Kea house will be in 2013 ;)

    2. Thanks Mrs Miller and Mr.M.
      I love my writing and go Kea!