Thursday, May 10, 2012

Autumn


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Autumn 


The wind puffed the leaves

onto the sparkling grass.

The sun shines

on the rusty leaves.

The birds chirping
on old, twisted branches.
                                                            
The Autumn leaves,
yellow, orange, red and
cocoa.

Like flames and caramel chocolate
melting off trees.

By Parris Petera

WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA

SELF ASSESSMENT
Includes four nouns (from observation)✓✓✓✓
Made the nouns do something✓✓✓✓
Started each new description on a new line✓✓✓✓
Extended each line so it makes more sense
(may include a who, where, why, what, when).
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5 comments:

  1. I hope everyone liked my Autumn poem.

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  2. Annemarie Kupa-PeteraTuesday, May 15, 2012

    What a great Poem darling. I really loved it, well done.

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  3. Awesome poem it's so cool

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